by Ethel Mortenson Davis
i the old woman,
with breath on my hand,
have come before–
down this hill with stoney sides–
the spears of grass
against my legs–
and then the sea
and its green smells
after the rain–
until this garden.
i have come
the flowers to be richer
in the coming spring,
reaching out for their smell
with only my finger tips,
i the old woman
at the whale
of the waves,
thinking i have
15 responses to “Old Woman”
So true, Ethel. Well put together poem….the form ‘dresses’ it perfectly…the message is clear . We look and yet, we don’t see because we will have time later…we think…..I love this poem……my best to you, tom
Oh me too! Beautiful poem.
I enjoyed your poem as well. Blessings, Ellen
Being an older woman myself, I so relate to your realization that you passed right by these wondrous sights so many times in the past. Beautiful scene described in the rhythms perfectly matching my “old woman” dawdling along to soak it all up these days!
So beautiful, with reverence–and sad, to me. God bless your day.
Your poem reminds me to seize the day.
Ethel, this is a beautiful reminder not to take anything for granted. I love all these images that stir the senses into remembering that we must be ever mindful and present – to the “whale of the waves”!
A great poem often builds with sensory images and leaves you with an emotional void that was the subject all along. This was well done. Thanks for sharing it.
Your poem speaks of taking today and making the most of it. Time passes so quickly. A good reminder here Ethel.
Yes, that’s very true: we go through life “thinking i have time // tomorrow” and “thinking the flowers to be richer in the coming spring”.
This is so beautiful and poignant. Thank you Ethel.
The older I get the more I realise that I must take the time to look – to really look.
Poetry has been part of the process in teaching me to do that.
Old age slips up on us while we put off til tomorrow what we might have done today…
This beautifully written poem fills me with sadness, with longing … and with gratitude. Thank you, Ethel. ~ Julie
Leaves the attentive reader refeeling what they are – human